Where do you prefer to live, in a big city or in a small town? Why?

2015-03-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Some people want to live in a big city because there are a lot of interesting places such as theater and amusement park. Others want to live in a small town since they can live less crowded place. In my case, I want to live in a small town. There are reasosns for this. Firstly, I do not live the place where there are many people such as Myung-Dong and Hong-Dae. Of course, we can enjoy diverse things in these places. For example, I can eat many delicious food because of variety of restaurant in there. But these placese also cause some crowdedness and sometimes we cannot move freely because of many people who visit there. I do not like such a crowdedness. Secondly, if the town is small, I can know and be familiar with almost people in the town. In the big city, I cannot know about too many people and it is difficult to know each other. Furthermore, I cannot know people who live in the very next. I think that it is not good and has no affection. Thus, I want to live in a small town.

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Good morning Miss [이름]! Thank you for sending this in. Please go over my corrections. Have a good day!~Kelly^^ Some people want to live in a big city because there are a lot of interesting places such as theater and amusement park. >> Some people want to live in a big city because there are a lot of interesting places that can be found there such as theaters and amusement parks. Others want to live in a small town since they can live less crowded place. >> Others want to live in a small town since they can live in a less crowded place. In my case, I want to live in a small town. There are reasons for this. >> Correct.Firstly, I do not live the place where there are many people such as Myung-Dong and Hong-Dae. >> Firstly, I do not live in places where there are many people such as Myung-Dong and Hong-Dae. Of course, we can enjoy diverse things in these places. >> Correct. For example, I can eat many delicious food because of variety of restaurant in there. >> For example, I can eat many delicious foods because of the variety of restaurants that can be found there. But these placese also cause some crowdedness and sometimes we cannot move freely because of many people who visit there. >> But theose places also cause some crowdedness and sometimes we cannot move freely because of many people who visit there. I do not like such a crowdedness. >> I do not like crowded places.Secondly, if the town is small, I can know and be familiar with almost people in the town. >>Secondly, if the town is small, I can know and be familiar with almost all the people there.  In the big city, I cannot know about too many people and it is difficult to know each other. >> In the big city, I it is difficult for people to know each other. Furthermore, I cannot know people who live in the very next. >> Furthermore, I cannot know the people who live next to my place. I think that it is not good and has no affection. >> I think that it is not good and it shows no affection towards others.Thus, I want to live in a small town. >> Correct.

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