Where do you usually get information about job hiring? Why do you prefer that site?
학생이 쓴 원문
I usually get information about job hiring through the church\'s site. My denomination conference notices job hiring for the pastor. They update and post information on their site every year. Before I apply my resume to church, I pray about my job deeply what God wants me to ministry. I would like to share my experience about looking for a job. Before I moved in the USA, I worked at Bethany Korean Methodist Church for a six years. I remind when I applied my resume to this church for the first time. Before working in Bethany Church, I didn\'t have any experience to apply my resume as an Intern. I didn\'t know how to apply and where do I have to work. I just wanted to work that God wants me to do. One day during the prayer time, God said to me in my mind, \"You will go to the church that I will prepare for you.\" After that, I was sure God\'s plan for me. I stopped my worrysome. And I just waited without doubt. After one year, I came across meeting Bethany Church\'s pastor who hired me.
강사 첨삭
Amen to this, Jane! Indeed, God works in mysterious ways. He always has a thousand ways to help us. -Faith-
I usually get information about job hiring through the church\'s site. >> CORRECT
My denomination conference notices job hiring for the pastor.
>> My denomination conference notifies us about job hiring for pastors.
They update and post information on their site every year.
>> CORRECT
OR They update and post information on their site annually.
Before I apply my resume to church, I pray about my job deeply what God wants me to ministry.
>> Before I forward my resume to a church, I pray about my job deeply to know what God wants me to minister.
I would like to share my experience about looking for a job.
>> Now, I would like to share my experience about looking for a job.
OR Now, I would like to share my experience about my job hunting.
Before I moved in the USA, I worked at Bethany Korean Methodist Church for a six years.
>> Before I moved to the USA, I worked at Bethany Korean Methodist Church for six years.
I remind when I applied my resume to this church for the first time.
>> I remember when I submit my resume to this church for the first time.
Before working in Bethany Church, I didn\'t have any experience to apply my resume as an Intern.
>> Before working in Bethany Church, I didn\'t have any experience to write on my resume as an intern.
I didn\'t know how to apply and where do I have to work.
>> I didn\'t know how to apply and where did I have to work.
I just wanted to work that God wants me to do.
>> I just wanted to work that God wanted me to do.
One day during the prayer time, God said to me in my mind, \"You will go to the church that I will prepare for you.\"
>> CORRECT
After that, I was sure God\'s plan for me.
>> After that, I was sure about God\'s plan for me.
I stopped my worrysome.
>> Therefore, I stopped worrying.
And I just waited without doubt.
>> CORRECT
After one year, I came across meeting Bethany Church\'s pastor who hired me.
>> After one year, I came across the Bethany Church\'s pastor who hired me.
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