Where do you want to be if you could be anywhere else?

2013-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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If I could be anywhere else in the world right now, I want to be in Toronto in Canada or Singapore for business and Dubai or Argentina for pleasure. Canadians are generally friendly, generous, and hospitable to strangers and even to different ethnics. In some countries, people often show their hostility toward different races or nations. The working environments in Canada look great. It has a good social security system, medical care and well organized cities to live. Singapore can compete with Canada for that purpose. For spending vacation or traveling, I like to go to countries in which I can feel and experience exotic things like different foods, different landscape, different people, different culture, etc. The Middle East countries look way different from western countries in all aspects. Argentina also boasts its very unique culture. The buildings are based on neoclassical architecture which is a mix of both Italian classical styles and French “Academic” styles.

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Good afternoon Sir [이름]! Thank you for sending me your composition. I suddenly thought about the country Argentina. I am not that knowledgable about that country, but after reading your composition. I want to visit that place. I think it is really fun to be there. Congratulations! You did really well in your essay today, You composed wonderful sentences and you even elaborated your ideas! Fantastic! Please tell me more about your ideas about this topic in class. See you! Have a fun day! Teacher Nina   If I could be anywhere else in the world right now, I want to be in Toronto in Canada or Singapore for business and Dubai or Argentina for pleasure. >> Correct! >> OR: If I could be anywhere else in the world right now, I wnat to be in Toronto, Canada or Singapore for business and Dubai or Argentina for pleasure. Canadians are generally friendly, generous, and hospitable to strangers and even to different ethnics. >> Correct! In some countries, people often show their hostility toward different races or nations. >> Correct! The working environments in Canada look great. >> The working environment in Canada looks great. >> OR: The working environment in Canada is great. It has a good social security system, medical care and well organized cities to live. >> Correct! >> OR: It has a good social security system, medical care and well organized cities to stay. Singapore can compete with Canada for that purpose. >> Correct! For spending vacation or traveling, I like to go to countries in which I can feel and experience exotic things like different foods, different landscape, different people, different culture, etc. >> Correct! The Middle East countries look way different from western countries in all aspects. >> Middle East countries look way different from western countries in all aspects. Argentina also boasts its very unique culture. >> Correct! The buildings are based on neoclassical architecture which is a mix of both Italian classical styles and French “Academic” styles. >> Correct!

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