Where do you want to travel to before you die?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to go dessert in any countrise before I die. It is because it\'s hard to go to the dessert and it might be dangerous becasuse there nothing. But I like hot and dry weather. and I feel overwhelming feel about the dessert.
I will see just sand and sun and sky. There were just wind sound. and some dessert is meet with sea. So I can see the fantastic scenery about dessert and sea converged.
But real dessert might be diffrent that I tought.
It just my think. I believe dessert have only good things like movies. So I have some fantagy about dessert.
Oneday I will go to the beautiful dessert.
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Hello [이름] [이름]!
Going to a desert is a nice idea. Travel to middle-east countries so you could experience the reality of the place and also feel how awesome it is to stay in that area. Have a nice trip in the future! ^^
~T. Maine
>> I want to go to a desert in any country before I die.
It is because it\'s hard to go to the dessert and it might be dangerous becasuse there nothing.
>>It is because it\'s hard to go to the desert and it might be dangerous because there\'s nothing there.
But I like hot and dry weather. and I feel overwhelming feel about the dessert.
>> But I like the hot and dry weather as well as I feel overwhelming about the place.
I will see just sand and sun and sky.
I will see just sand and sun and sky.
>> I will just see the sand, the sun, and the sky.
There were just wind sound. and some dessert is meet with sea.
>> There is just the sound of the wind and some desert meet the sea.
So I can see the fantastic scenery about dessert and sea converged.
>> So I can see the fantastic scenery of the desert and the sea converged to it.
But real dessert might be diffrent that I tought.
But real dessert might be diffrent that I tought.
>> But real deserts might be different from what I thought.
It just my think.
>> It is just my thinking.
I believe dessert have only good things like movies.
>> I believe deserts have only good things in the movies.
So I have some fantagy about dessert.
>> So I have some fantasy about the desert.
Oneday I will go to the beautiful dessert.
Oneday I will go to the beautiful dessert.
>> One day, I will go to the beautiful desert.
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