Where dres o you want to celebrate your next birthday?
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I want to go to the Finix park my next birthday, Beacause I want go there.
In the Finix park I want to swimming ,eat a meat and a marshmallow,
Beacause I did only 1time.
And I eat yummy food in the restrant,
Beacause there\'s food is yummy.
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Hi [이름]!
Happy birthday to you and see you on Monday ^^
T. DON
I want to go to the Finix park my next birthday, Beacause I want go there.
In the Finix park I want to swimming ,eat a meat and a marshmallow,
Beacause I did only 1time.
And I eat yummy food in the restrant,
Beacause there\'s food is yummy.
In the Finix park I want to swimming ,eat a meat and a marshmallow,
Beacause I did only 1time.
And I eat yummy food in the restrant,
Beacause there\'s food is yummy.
>> I want to go to the Phoenix park on my next birthday because I just want to go there. In the Phoenix [이름] I want to swim, eat meat and marshmallow because I only experienced it 1 time. I want to eat food in their restaurant, because the food their is yummy.
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