Where I will live when I am old.

2022-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Annie

학생이 쓴 원문

First, when I am old, I want to live house where a lot of technology is applied. Because I can enjoy a luxurious life. Second, when I am old, I want to live my grandmother\'s house. Because my grandmother\'s house is very wide. Third, when I am old, I want to live in my house. Because there are memories of a long time together.

강사 첨삭

How nice! Me too, I want to live in a house  where a lot of technology is applied so I could have much fun and use the technology to learn new things. Thanks for sharing [이름]! See you soon!

~T. Annie


First, when I am old, I want to live house where a lot of technology is applied. Because I can enjoy a luxurious life.
>>First, when I am old, I want to live in a house where a lot of technology is applied because I can enjoy a luxurious life. 
Second, when I am old, I want to live my grandmother\'s house. Because my grandmother\'s house is very wide.
>>Second, when I am old, I want to live in my grandmother\'s house. because my grandmother\'s house is very wide. 
Third, when I am old, I want to live in my house. Because there are memories of a long time together.
>>Third, when I am old, I want to live in my house because there are memories of a long time together.

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