Where I would like to stay during retirement
학생이 쓴 원문
At first, as my parents will be still alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
I have lived in the province because of our family business, far[이름]g, so I don\'t have any resistance to stay in the province.
It is also one of the reason that I don\'t intend to get married yet.
But, after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.
I have a plan to purchase a my own house in forties.
If I put this plan into action, I can live independently with my family in the city.
As I have no plan to marriage now, I think It is more easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friend than living in the province.
강사 첨삭
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At first, as my parents will be still alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
>> At first, as my parents will still be alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
I have lived in the province because of our family business, far[이름]g, so I don\'t have any resistance to stay in the province.
I have lived in the province because of our family business, far[이름]g, so I don\'t have any resistance to stay in the province.
>> I have lived in the province because of our family business, far[이름]g, so I don\'t have any resistance to staying in the province.
It is also one of the reason that I don\'t intend to get married yet.
It is also one of the reason that I don\'t intend to get married yet.
>> It is also one of the reasons that I don\'t intend to get married yet.
But, after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.>> But after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.
I have a plan to purchase a my own house in forties.>> I have a plan to purchase my own house in my forties.
If I put this plan into action, I can live independently with my family in the city.>> CORRECT
As I have no plan to marriage now, I think It is more easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friend than living in the province.>> As I have no plan to get married now, I think it is easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friends than to live in the province.
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