Where is the best place to be for the holidays?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are so many place I like. one of the best thing is amusement park. even though this place is so many people on weekend, amusement park rides are very fun. those were forgetting tired for so many people. and having a cute hairband, photo spot. the restaurant foods are so expensive in the amusement park. however, it is delicious after the ride machines. For that reasons, if we were go to the amusement park, because, we can empty our all day we spend all the times. therefore, I enjoy going to amusement park for the holidays.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Clara. It\'s lovely to know you think the amusement park is one of the best places to spend the holidays. ^^ But I totally agree, especially, if you want to relieve your stress. I hope you have a wonderful Chuseok! I\'ll talk to you in class ~ teacher Jane ^o^
There are so many place I like.
>>> There are so many places I like.
one of the best thing is amusement park.
>>> One of the best is the amusement park.
even though this place is so many people on weekend, amusement park rides are very fun.
>>> Even though there are many people there on weekends, amusement park rides are very fun.
those were forgetting tired for so many people.
>>> These help people forget/ relieve their stress.
and having a cute hairband, photo spot.
>>> I can put on a cute hairband and take a photo.
the restaurant foods are so expensive in the amusement park.
>>> Restaurants in amusement parks sell expensive food.
however, it is delicious after the ride machines.
>>> However, after the rides, it\'s nice to try the delicious foods.
For that reasons, if we were go to the amusement park, because, we can empty our all day we spend all the times.
>>> For those reasons, we can spend the whole day at the amusement park.
therefore, I enjoy going to amusement park for the holidays.
>>> Therefore, I enjoy going to the amusement park for the holidays.
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