Where is the most beautiful place you have been? Describe it.
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I would say that the most beautiful place I've been is Cornwall Park in Auckland, Newzealand. I visited there with my friend a few years ago when I stayed in Newzealand to study English and take some lectures through my university program during winter vacation. The first impressive scenery we faced was plenty of sheep spread over the park which of the landscape was like a hill. My friend and I was so impressed and feel some of affection when we saw little and cute baby sheep. Also, the weather was so precious and the colors of sky were incredibly beautiful because that time when we were there was around sunset. As for describing the sky, the color was a combination of gold, orange and sky blue, and there were clouds seemed like feathers. I felt freedom with feeling a nice breeze and breathing clean air deeply. In the flat area of the park, there was a natives group called Maori and they sang a song playing traditional instruments. That was quite an unforgettable scenery for me.
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Hello [이름]! Happy Monday! Thank you for answering the homework. It\'s a very interesting story you have here. ^_^ Your experience was quite incredible. ^_^
~T. IRENE~
I would say that the most beautiful place I\'ve been is Cornwall Park in Auckland, New Zealand.
>> Correct.
I visited there with my friend a few years ago when I stayed in New Zealand to study English and take some lectures through my university program during winter vacation.
>> Correct.
The first impressive scenery we faced was plenty of sheep spread over the park which of the landscape was like a hill.
>> The first impressive scenery we witnessed was quite a number of sheep all over the park which was like a hill.
My friend and I was so impressed and feel some of affection when we saw little and cute baby sheep.
>> My friend and I were so impressed and felt some affection when we saw those cute baby sheep or lambs.
Also, the weather was so precious and the colors of sky were incredibly beautiful because that time when we were there was around sunset.
>> Also, the weather was great and the sky was so colorful because we were there during sunset.
As for describing the sky, the color was a combination of gold, orange and sky blue, and there were clouds seemed like feathers.
>> To describe the sky\'s color further, it was a combination of gold, orange and blue. The clouds were like soft feathers scattered in the sky.
I felt freedom with feeling a nice breeze and breathing clean air deeply.
>> I felt the freedom to touch the gentle breeze and breath in the clean air.
In the flat area of the park, there was a natives group called Maori and they sang a song playing traditional instruments.
>> In the leveled part of the park, there was a group of Maori natives who were singing and playing traditional music.
That was quite an unforgettable scenery for me.
>> Correct.
OR>> That was quite an unforgettable scene for me.
~T. IRENE~
I would say that the most beautiful place I\'ve been is Cornwall Park in Auckland, New Zealand.
>> Correct.
I visited there with my friend a few years ago when I stayed in New Zealand to study English and take some lectures through my university program during winter vacation.
>> Correct.
The first impressive scenery we faced was plenty of sheep spread over the park which of the landscape was like a hill.
>> The first impressive scenery we witnessed was quite a number of sheep all over the park which was like a hill.
My friend and I was so impressed and feel some of affection when we saw little and cute baby sheep.
>> My friend and I were so impressed and felt some affection when we saw those cute baby sheep or lambs.
Also, the weather was so precious and the colors of sky were incredibly beautiful because that time when we were there was around sunset.
>> Also, the weather was great and the sky was so colorful because we were there during sunset.
As for describing the sky, the color was a combination of gold, orange and sky blue, and there were clouds seemed like feathers.
>> To describe the sky\'s color further, it was a combination of gold, orange and blue. The clouds were like soft feathers scattered in the sky.
I felt freedom with feeling a nice breeze and breathing clean air deeply.
>> I felt the freedom to touch the gentle breeze and breath in the clean air.
In the flat area of the park, there was a natives group called Maori and they sang a song playing traditional instruments.
>> In the leveled part of the park, there was a group of Maori natives who were singing and playing traditional music.
That was quite an unforgettable scenery for me.
>> Correct.
OR>> That was quite an unforgettable scene for me.
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