Where is the nearest amusement park in your city?

2020-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

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Dear [Name], Woongjin Play paly world is in our city. it is a building for Winter enjoyment. All season(spring, summer, fall, winter) you can enjoy for winter plays. for example, the sky, the skate, the snow board and so on. but I have been to there. because of expensive ticket for enterence. but if you come to here, I recommand here for you. it will be a suprise experience in Korea.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]~
Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate it very much. 

Here are your corrections:

Dear [Name],


Woongjin Play paly world is in our city. 
>> You can go to Woonjin Play world in our city.

it is a building for Winter enjoyment.
>> It is a building to enjoy during winter.

All season(spring, summer, fall, winter) you can enjoy for winter plays. 
>> You can play here in all seasons.

for example, the sky, the skate, the snow board and so on.
>> There are things to play such as the sky, the skate, the snow board and so on.

but I have been to there. because of expensive ticket for enterence. 
>> I have been there and the entrance ticket is very expensive.

but if you come to here, I recommand here for you.
>> But, if you come here, I recommend you to visit that place.

it will be a suprise experience in Korea.
>> It will be a surprising experience in Korea.

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