Where is your hometown? Is your hometown famous for anything?
학생이 쓴 원문
Let me tell you about hometown.
I was born in Seoul, but it is so big that I I cannot explain specific things.
That\'s why I want to tell you about a town which is called \"Mokdong\" that I was born in .
There are many towns which are famous for education in Seoul and one of them is my town.
Those who want to study more and competitively than others come to these cities.
Therefore, many parents consider moving to these cities for their children\'s high quality educational environment.
I grew up there so I think I\'m a bit competitive person.
+Is it too personal...?
and I wrote it down for my speaking test! Is it okay?
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] Ha! This composition you made is great. Don\'t worry because it doesn\'t sound very personal and it is also not bad when you share something persnal when you answer the questions. Look below for the corrections and keep up the good work! ~~T.Dee
Let me tell you about hometown.
>>Let me tell you about my hometown.
I was born in Seoul, but it is so big that I I cannot explain specific things.
>>I was born in Seoul, but it is so big and complicated that I cannot explain specific things abou itt.
That\'s why I want to tell you about a town which is called \"Mokdong\" that I was born in .
>>That\'s why I want to tell you about a town which is called \"Mokdong\" which is where I was born.
There are many towns which are famous for education in Seoul and one of them is my town.
>>CORRECT!
Those who want to study more and competitively than others come to these cities.
>>Those who want to study more and be more competitive come to these cities.
Therefore, many parents consider moving to these cities for their children\'s high quality educational environment. >>Therefore, many parents consider moving to these cities for their children to get high quality education.
I grew up there so I think I\'m a bit competitive person.
>>CORRECT!
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