Where there is a will, there is a way

2013-08-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kay

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I love the quote "Where there is a will, there is a way" Thesedays, many people don't know what they really want to do and just follow others. But this quote makes me an active person who drives ones life wonderful. If I just tried to do everything like others, I would under stressed and not happy with my daylife. I would concentrated on getting a good job which is famous big companies with lots of money and vyied to won the race. So I would spend my life just comparing others lives. But, I've made [이름] life with my will and it leads to beautiful life. When i was in University, I tried to go to China to study chinese. To go to china, I worked an franchise icecream shop to earn money. After working 1 year, I finally went to China. After another 1 year, I helped Chinese who came to Korea for their performance, I was an translator. I was happy with that. Eventhough I didn't get a job which is realating in Chinese company, but I enjoy making friends with Chinese.

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Hi Ms. [이름]!   Thank you so much for doing your homework and for sharing me your thoughts about the quote. ^^ I admire your willingness and strong principle in life, keep that up. I hope you will be able to inspire a lot of your friends given that kind of attitude. I will see you in class and let\'s work hard to achieve our goals!   Teacher Kay ^.^   I love the quote \"Where there is a will, there is a way\" >>I love the quote: \"When there is a will, there is a way.\" (Take note of the punctuation marks ^^)Thesedays, many people don\'t know what they really want to do and just follow others.>>Now a days, many people don\'t know what they really want to do and just follow others\' footsteps. But this quote makes me an active person who drives ones life wonderful.>>But this quote makes me an active person who drives one\'s like wonderfully.If I just tried to do everything like others, I would under stressed and not happy with my daylife. >>If I would just do everything like the others, I would be having a lot of stress and I won\'t be happy with my everyday life.I would concentrated on getting a good job which is famous big companies with lots of money and vyied to won the race. >>I would concentrate  on getting a good job in big companies who compensates lots of money and view to won the race. So I would spend my life just comparing others lives. >>So, I would just spend my life comparing it to others.But, I\'ve made [이름] life with my will and it leads to beautiful life.>>But, I\'ve made a [이름] life with willingness that leads to a beautiful life.When i was in University, I tried to go to China to study chinese. >>When I was in a University, I tried going to Chinay to study Chinese.To go to china, I worked an franchise icecream shop to earn money. >>In order to go to China, I have to work in a franchise Ice cream shop to earn money.After working 1 year, I finally went to China. >>Correct!After another 1 year, I helped Chinese who came to Korea for their performance, I was an translator. >>After another year, I was their transator, I helped Chinese people who visited Korea for a performance. I was happy with that. >>Correct! Eventhough I didn\'t get a job which is realating in Chinese company, but I enjoy making friends with Chinese. >>Even though I was not able to get a job which is related to a Chinese company, I still enjoyed making friends with Chinese people.

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