Where would you like to go for an adventure a jungle, a desert, a small island, or a city?
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Hi, [이름]nah!
I want to go to a small island too for an adventure. I also love nature. T[이름]k you for sharing and have a blessed day!
-Teacher Shelly-
I love a travel all of the world.
>>> I love to travel the world.
If I go to for an adventure, I want to go a small island.
>>>If I\'ll go for an adventure, I want to go to a small island.
I love island,because not to crowed ,as well as very peaceful.
>>> I love an island because it is not crowded and as well as it is very peaceful.
I went many island.
>>> I went to many islands.
One of the best place was the Lanai island .
>>> One of the best places was Lanai Island.
There is located in Hawaii.
>>> It is located in Hawaii.
The Hawaii have six island.
>>> Hawaii has six islands.
Most of island are very busy also commercialized.
>>> Most of the islands are very busy and commercialized.
Because the Hawaii is a tourist attraction.
>>> Hawaii is a tourist attraction.
The Lanai is only one hotel.
>>> Lanai has only one hotel.
There is no traffic light and there are couple of small restaurants.
>>> There is no traffic light and there are a couple of small restaurants.
I saw many beautiful trees, fruits, birds, an animals,
>>> I saw many beautiful trees, fruits, birds and animals.
By the way I went to place was Bill gates engagement area view was breath taking.
>>> By the way, I went the Bill Gates engagement area, the view was breathtaking.
As well as weather was unbelievable beautiful.
>>> As well as the weather was unbelievably beautiful.
I love nature.
>>> Correct!
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