Which career path do you intend to pursue later in your life? ⑴
학생이 쓴 원문
I'm intending to pursue a world-wide dentist. It's because I want to prevent various kinds of teeth problems. To do that I must focus on how I'm going to achieve my goals. It may be much more difficult that I think, though I'll never give up and try my best. If I never give up hope and study hard, I could definitely accomplish this career path. Nothing is impossible in my way! If I endeavor diligently for my dream and goals, I can certainly do it. I firmly believe that I can do all things through Christ! If my determination is firm, than I will be able to achieve my goals. I'd also like to deliver speeches to many students that are frustrated. I wand to help them to get a dream and hope.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jin! You are not just tending to pursue your dream to become a worlwide dentist baby but you are also tending to be an inspiration to everybody! THEN GO FOR YOUR GOALS! Yes, you can do impossible things when you believe of what you can do. Aja!
-Teacher Chloe
I\'m intending to pursue a world-wide dentist.
>>I am tending to pursue to become a worldwide dentist.
It\'s because I want to prevent various kinds of teeth problems.
>>Correct!
To do that I must focus on how I\'m going to achieve my goals.
>>Correct!
>>To do it I must focus on how I\'m going to achieve my goals.
It may be much more difficult that I think, though I\'ll never give up and try my best.
>>It may be much more difficult than I think but I\'ll never give up but to try my best.
>>It may be much more difficult than I think but I\'ll never give up but to try my very best.
If I never give up hope and study hard, I could definitely accomplish this career path.
>>I will never give up. Thus, I hope to study very hard so I can accomplish everything that it takes for my career path.
Nothing is impossible in my way!
>>Correct!
>>Nothing is impossible!
If I endeavor diligently for my dream and goals, I can certainly do it.
>>If I endeavour diligently for my dreams and goals, I could certainly do it.
>>If I endeavour diligently for my dreams and goals in life, I could certainly do it.
I firmly believe that I can do all things through Christ!
>>Correct!
If my determination is firm, than I will be able to achieve my goals.
>>If my determination is firm then I am sure that I would be able to achieve my goals.
I\'d also like to deliver speeches to many students that are frustrated.
>>I\'d also like to deliver speeches to many students who are frustrated.
I wand to help them to get a dream and hope.
>>I want to help them get a dream and a hope.
>>I want to help them achieving their dreams and goals in life.
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