Which celebrity would you like to meet? What would you do if you could spend a day with this person?
학생이 쓴 원문
Which celebrity would you like to meet? What would you do if you could spend a day with this person? Answer in 5 sentences or more.
I am a fan of IU. She is a singer and actress who has great talent. I thought she will be the one of the most popular person in Korea someday when I saw her first time on the TV show. She has many hit songs and dramas. To be honest, her acting is not good really. However, I don\'t care about that her acting is good or not, because she is super gorgerous. That is the point. I hope she to stay celebrity continuously.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jay!
This is the first time you expressed yourself like this.
It\'s good.
The sentences are clear and are on point.
Good job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I am a fan of IU.
>> Correct
She is a singer and actress who has great talent.
>> She is a singer and an actress who has great talent.
I thought she will be the one of the most popular person in Korea someday when I saw her first time on the TV show.
>> I thought that she would be the one of the most popular persons in Korea someday when I saw her for the first time on a TV show.
She has many hit songs and dramas.
>> She has many hit songs and shows.
To be honest, her acting is not good really.
>> To be honest, her acting skills are not that good.
However, I don\'t care about that her acting is good or not, because she is super gorgerous.
>> However, I don\'t care whether her acting skills are good or not, because she is super gorgeous.
That is the point.
>> Correct
I hope she to stay celebrity continuously.
>> I hope she would always stay a celebrity.
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