Which charity or charitable cause is most deserving of money?

2019-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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Actually, i don\'t like charity or charitable thing. And also i don\'t want to donate money for them. I saw lots of charity advertisements on the past. And i figured out those ads were fake. they were not true. For example, I saw the advertisement which was about a very poor orphan. It made me like i want to contribute them. So i sent some money to them. But after some time pass, I saw the news about the charity advertisements. And that news said that the charity company which i donated had been looking for the actor who could really act like orphans. So the orphan who was i saw before was the actor. He can literally speak English fluently and have home, his family own. I have more reason that i don\'t believe the charity company but this is the most huge reason that i don\'t believe the charity companies.

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Hello [이름],

Thank you for doing this homework!

Have a great day then!

Teacher ELLY.

Which charity or charitable cause is most deserving of money?

Actually, i don\'t like charity or charitable thing.

>>Actually, I don\'t like charity or charitable things.

And also i don\'t want to donate money for them.

>>And also, I don\'t want to donate money to them.

I saw lots of charity advertisements on the past.

>>I saw lots of charitable advertisements in the past.

And i figured out those ads were fake.

>>And I figured out that those ads were fake.

They were not true.

CORRECT!

or>>They were not honest ads.

For example, I saw the advertisement which was about a very poor orphan.

>>For example, I saw an advertisement about a very poor orphan.

It made me like i want to contribute them.

>>It made me like I want to contribute something to them.

So I sent some money to them.

CORRECT!

or>>So, I gave them some money.

But after some time pass, I saw the news about the charity advertisements.

>>But after some time have passed, I saw a news about the charitable advertisement.

And that news said that the charity company which i donated had been looking for the actor who could really act like orphans.

>>And that news gave an information that the charitable agency, where I donated my money, had been looking for some actors who could really act like orphans.

So the orphan who was i saw before was the actor.

>>So, the orphan whom I saw before was actually an actor.

He can literally speak English fluently and have home, his family own.

>>He can literally speak English fluently and he has a house with his own family.

I have more reason that i don\'t believe the charity company but this is the most huge reason that i don\'t believe the charity companies.

>>I have more reasons why I don\'t believe these charities, but this is the hugest reason why I don\'t believe such companies.

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