Which countries do you want to visit?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I have to stay in other countries for business, I would choose the U.S.A., Canada, or Singapore. The countries are advanced, well organized, and convenient to stay. However, if I were given a chance to travel to other countries for pleasure, I would go to Sweden, Argentina, or Lebanon. From the endless woods of southern and middle Sweden to the mountains in the north and west, there is endless recreation for anyone who enjoys the wild and free. Argentina boasts its very unique culture. The buildings are based on neoclassical architecture which is a mix of both Italian classical styles and French “Academic” styles. Middle East countries have their unique cultures that are different from those of western countries. For spending vacation or traveling, I like to go to countries in which I can feel and experience exotic things like different foods, different landscape, different people, different culture, etc.
강사 첨삭
Hello there,
Thank you so much for sharing your ideal places that you want to visit.
I really enjoyed reading your composition.
That was really impressive!
I really appreciate you expressing your thoughts.
It shows that you are an adventurous person.
Keep up the good work!
However, you just need to check some of the corrections below.
Take care and hope you can visit the places you mentioned in your composition.
See you in class!
Teacher Nina
Which countries do you want to visit?
If I have to stay in other countries for business, I would choose the U.S.A., Canada, or Singapore.
>> If I have to stay in other countries for business, I would choose U.S.A., Canada, or Singapore.
The countries are advanced, well organized, and convenient to stay.
>> These countries are advance/advanced in technology, well-organized, and convenient to live in.
However, if I were given a chance to travel to other countries for pleasure, I would go to Sweden, Argentina, or Lebanon.
>> correct
From the endless woods of southern and middle Sweden to the mountains in the north and west, there is endless recreation for anyone who enjoys the wild and free.
>> From the endless woods of southern and middle Sweden to the mountains in the north and west, there are endless recreations for anyone who enjoys the wild and free.
Argentina boasts its very unique culture.
>> correct
The buildings are based on neoclassical architecture which is a mix of both Italian classical styles and French Academic styles.
>> correct
Middle East countries have their unique cultures that are different from those of western countries.
>> correct
>> OR: Middle east countries have their unique cultures that are different from western countries
For spending vacation or traveling, I like to go to countries in which I can feel and experience exotic things like different foods, different landscape, different people, different culture, etc.
>> For spending vacation or traveling, I like to go to countries where I can feel and experience exotic things like different food, different landscapes, different people, different cultures, etc.
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