Which country would you like to visit?

2013-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Risa

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if i can have like that appoutunity, i will go to the south America. when i was in Australia, i had many friends from Brazil. They were ausome! They were very passionate on everything they do especilly soccer. They looked like having fun on their life always.I want to visit and hang out with them again so I can get feeling of freedom and happy.also, There are many historical site like a Inca, Maya, Machu Picchu and so on. I have naver been to the South America. so, it has been a first place that I wish to visit since I am 25 years old. If I go trip to the south Aemria, I will visit countris all around of S-America. and also, I want to go the South Pole. It will be the most dramatic day of my life.

강사 첨삭

South America! Interesting choice. :) Please share the photos you\'d take if you\'d have the opportunity to visit the continent! I hope that you\'d see your friends there too. :)   Please see the corrections and let me know in class if there were ideas that I didn\'t catch.   Cheers, T.Risa :)   if i can have like that appoutunity, i will go to the south America. >>If I would have that opportunity, I will got to South America. when i was in Australia, i had many friends from Brazil. >>When I was in Australia, I had many friends from Brazil. They were ausome! >>They were awesome! They were very passionate on everything they do especilly soccer. >>They are passionate about everything they do especially soccer. They looked like having fun on their life always. >>They looked like they always have fun. I want to visit and hang out with them again so I can get feeling of freedom and happy. >>I want to visit and hang out with them so I can feel free and happy again. also, There are many historical site like a Inca, Maya, Machu Picchu and so on. >>Also, there are many historical sites to see like the remains of the Inca, Maya, Machu Picchu civilizations. I have naver been to the South America. >>I have never been to South America. so, it has been a first place that I wish to visit since I am 25 years old. >>In fact, it is the place that I wished to visit first when I was 25 years old. >>In fact, it is the place that I wished to visit first when I was 25. If I go trip to the south Aemria, I will visit countris all around of S-America. >>If I go to South Anerica, I will visit all the countries of the continent. and also, I want to go the South Pole. >>And also, I want to go to South Pole. It will be the most dramatic day of my life. >>That will be the most dramatic day of my life.

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