Which day of the year are you most likely to spend with your family?

2021-06-30 · 첨삭 강사 Maine

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My family usually eat out near the weekends of each birthday. We go to the great restaurant, For example we love wedding hall buffet, Korean beef restaurant, or the restaurant which have beautiful garden. My mother thought the gathering is very important. Sometimes I\'m sad because I must have the meals giving up the important things. When I leave alone in other city that is far my family home, I had to study the day before difficult exam, but my mother didn\'t understand me, so she forced to participate. Therefore, I went my family\'s city spending much time, and my exam was spoiled. But now, my family tries to respect private work each other. It is great change. My extended family usually tries to gather during special days of Korea. When I was young, about all family member However, all member can\'t gather, because they\'re busy. I also can\'t participate in the meeting sometimes, but I want to see them always. I enjoy my family gathering. I can\'t wait later meeting.

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-T. Maine


My family usually eat out near the weekends of each birthday.

>>My family usually eats out before the weekend of someone\'s birthday.
 We go to the great restaurant, For example we love wedding hall buffet, Korean beef restaurant, or the restaurant which have beautiful garden.

>>We go to a great restaurant, for example a buffet, a Korean beef restaurant, or the restaurant with a beautiful garden.
 My mother thought the gathering is very important.

>>My mother thought that gathering was very important.
 Sometimes I\'m sad because I must have the meals giving up the important things.

>>Sometimes I feel sad because I should have joined my family during meal time, but I have to give up some important things.
 When I leave alone in other city that is far my family home, I had to study the day before difficult exam, but my mother didn\'t understand me, so she forced to participate.

>>When I live alone in another city which is far from my home, I had to study for my exam.  However, my mother forced me to participate in the gathering.  She didn\'t understand my situation.

Therefore, I went my family\'s city spending much time, and my exam was spoiled.

>>Therefore, I went to my hometown, but spoiled my exam.
 But now, my family tries to respect private work each other.

>>Now, my family tries to respect each family members\' responsibility.

It is great change.

>>It is a great change.
 My extended family usually tries to gather during special days of Korea.

>>My extended family usually have a reunion during Korean special holidays.
When I was young, about all family member 

>>When I was young, I met all my family members.
 However, all member can\'t gather, because they\'re busy.

>>However, all members can\'t come together because they are all busy.
 I also can\'t participate in the meeting sometimes, but I want to see them always.

>>Sometimes I can\'t also participate, but I want to see my family.
 I enjoy my family gathering. I can\'t wait later meeting.

>>I enjoy each family gathering.  I can\'t wait to see them soon.

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