Which do you think is more important: money or job security in a job? Why?
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I think both are important. but, If I have a lot of money, I don't need worry about job security. so, I think more important thing is how much money we have.
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but, If I have a lot of money, I don\'t need worry about job security.
>>>But if I have a lot of money, I don\'t need to worry about job security.
so, I think more important thing is how much money we have.
>>> So, I think the more important thing is how much money we have.
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