Which do you value more, time or money?

2020-02-04 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

학생이 쓴 원문

I can definitely say that time is more valuable than money because money can\'t buy time , on the contrary if we have time we can get money. All have same time in our lives regardless how much assets they have. I have seen a lot of books and articles about time management. It shows that time management is one of the most important factors to be successful. However, there are still problem between rich and poor people before we are born. Many people insist that the gab between rich and poor people cause inequality and polarization that can\'t be solved with one\'s efforts by putting their time. I can agree what people are worried and I can understand that one\'s success depends on how much money their parents or ancestors have. However, I would like to believe that everybody has chance to be happy if we put a lot of efforts without unnecessary time spend.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Mr. [이름]. Your efforts in answering your homework is very much appreciated. Thanks for your views about the question.

Again, keep yourself healthy and stay safe from the virus. See you in class! ^_^

~T.Avery

I can definitely say that time is more valuable than money because money can\'t buy time , on the contrary if we have time we can get money.

>> CORRECT

All have same time in our lives regardless how much assets they have.

>> All have the same amount of time in our lives regardless of how much assets we have.

I have seen a lot of books and articles about time management.

>> CORRECT

It shows that time management is one of the most important factors to be successful.

>> CORRECT

However, there are still problem between rich and poor people before we are born.

>> However, there are still problems between rich and poor people before we were born.

Many people insist that the gab between rich and poor people cause inequality and polarization that can\'t be solved with one\'s efforts by putting their time.

>> Many people insist that the gab between rich and poor people causes inequality and polarization that can\'t be solved with one\'s efforts by allocating their time.

I can agree what people are worried and I can understand that one\'s success depends on how much money their parents or ancestors have.

>> I can relate to what people are worried about and I can understand that one\'s success depends on how much money their parents or ancestors have.

However, I would like to believe that everybody has chance to be happy if we put a lot of efforts without unnecessary time spend.

>> However, I would like to believe that everybody has a chance to be happy if we put a lot of efforts without spending time unnecessarily.

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