Which famous celebrity influenced you the most and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
Famous celebrity influenced me the most is BTS because when I was in 1st grade, I faced the problem. I thought that I\'m alone and I was depressed. Suddenly, I watched a video about BTS and listened to their music. I am comforted by their music and I could solve the problem. Like these, they made me solve it, so I\'m thankful to them. I hope that many people which think \'I\'m alone\' listen to their music, can be comforted and can solve their own problems.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kimbely :)
Wow, they really had a big impact to you. I hope they can help more people as well. :)
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Famous celebrity influenced me the most is BTS because when I was in 1st grade, I faced the problem.
>> The famous celebrities that influenced me the most it BTS because when I was in first grad, I faced a problem.
>> The famous celebrities that influenced me the most it BTS because when I was in first grad, I faced a problem.
I thought that I\'m alone and I was depressed.
>> CORRECT
Suddenly, I watched a video about BTS and listened to their music.
>> CORRECT
I am comforted by their music and I could solve the problem.
>> I am comforted by their music and it helped me solve my problem.
Like these, they made me solve it, so I\'m thankful to them.
>> This is why I am thankful for them.
I hope that many people which think \'I\'m alone\' listen to their music, can be comforted and can solve their own problems.
>> I hope that many people, who think that they are alone, will listen to their music. They will feel comforted and will be able to solve their problems.
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