Which famous celebrity influenced you the most and why?

2022-02-28 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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For me, \'Park Hyo-shin\' influenced me the most. He is a singer, and he is really good at singing so everybody call him that he is the legend. He is little old because he is almost 50, but I don\'t feel like his songs are cold. And I like his songs, and also I like his skills and voice. And he is my role model for being a musician too. His songs inspired me the most, so \'Park Hyo-shin\' is the celebrity who influenced me the most.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:)

Wow! I watched one of his videos because I got curious. He really is good at what he does. 

I hope that  he can inspire more people into music. :) 

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For me, \'Park Hyo-shin\' influenced me the most.
>> CORRECT

He is a singer, and he is really good at singing so everybody call him that he is the legend.
>> He is a really good singer so everybody calls him a legend. 

He is little old because he is almost 50, but I don\'t feel like his songs are cold.
>> He is a little old.  He is almost at his 50\'s but I don\'t feel like his songs are old as well. 

And I like his songs, and also I like his skills and voice.
>> I like his songs, skills and voice. 

And he is my role model for being a musician too.
>> He is my role model for being a musician too. 

His songs inspired me the most, so \'Park Hyo-shin\' is the celebrity who influenced me the most.
>> CORRECT

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