Which is better, shopping in shops or shopping online?
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of course shopping online. because when we shopping in shops, there are many things which bother me to shop. like crowded people, noisy sound and so kind clerk. first of all, i want to shop alone with any bothering. but in shopping mall there are some kind clerks. And they always want to talk with me. so i cant concentrate at shopping. and also you know there are so many people in mall right? The sound they made makes me confused. so i love to shop at online. it is much cheaper than mall and also no one bother me.
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Hello
Wow! You made your homework early tonight. I appreciate the effort. Keep on practicing the correct grammar patterns and get used to them. ^^
~T. Maine
>> Of course, I prefer shopping online because when we go to the shops, there are many things which bother me.
like crowded people, noisy sound and so kind clerk.
>> Examples of these are crowded people, noisy background sounds, and kind clerks.
first of all, i want to shop alone with any bothering.
>> First of all, I want to shop alone without anything bothering me.
but in shopping mall there are some kind clerks.
>> But in shopping malls, there are some kind clerks.
And they always want to talk with me.
>> They always want to talk with me.
so i cant concentrate at shopping.
>> So I can\'t concentrate on shopping.
and also you know there are so many people in mall right?
>>And also you know, there are so many people in the mall.
The sound they made makes me confused. so i love to shop at online.
>>The sound they make makes me confused, so I love to shop online.
it is much cheaper than mall and also no one bother me.
>> It is much cheaper than the mall and no one could bother me.
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