Which is better: spending holidays at home or traveling? Explain your opinion.
학생이 쓴 원문
I prefer to travel on holidays.
It takes a lot of money and time to travel especially on holidays.
That\'s why I\'m not able to travel every holiday, but I try to leave from my daily life on holidays.
I like having new experiences and emotions while traveling.
That\'s why I prefer to travel on holidays.
강사 첨삭
You clearly explained your preference for traveling over staying at home, and you gave strong reasoning by mentioning new experiences and breaking from routine. Your ideas are organized and easy to follow. To improve, focus on smoother phrasing like “traveling during holidays” and consistent verb usage (enjoy having). Overall, your response is personal, clear, and well-structured, great job!
-Teacher Wela
It takes a lot of money and time to travel especially on holidays.
>> Traveling, especially during holidays, requires a lot of money and time.
That\'s why I\'m not able to travel every holiday, but I try to leave from my daily life on holidays.
>> That\'s why I cannot travel every holiday, but I try to take a break from my daily life.
I like having new experiences and emotions while traveling.
>> I enjoy having new experiences and feelings while traveling.
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