Which is more effective for reducing stress: changing your mindset or changing your lifestyle? Expla
학생이 쓴 원문
I think chaning our mindset is more effective for reducing stress than chaning our lifestyle. Suppose that we feel stress from work due to a strange senior member. There\'re two choices. The first one is quit a job or transfer work section. This is a case of chaning lifestyle. And second one is changing thinking which he is a weirdo by nature and has nothing to do with us. If we select the first option, there is a possiblity of being another stranger in other sector. And the stress still bother you. On the other hands, if we change our thinking, there aren\'t any problem. Of course, it\'s more harder option for ourselves.
강사 첨삭
Good Morning, Mary! You explained your opinion clearly and used a practical example to compare mindset and lifestyle changes, which made your answer easy to understand. I especially liked how you showed the long-term advantage of changing one’s mindset instead of avoiding the situation. Your conclusion was realistic and thoughtful, acknowledging that changing mindset is harder but more effective. To improve, focus on spelling (changing, possibility), article use (quit a job, change a work section), and verb forms (the stress still bothers you, on the other hand). Also, try to smooth transitions between sentences for better flow. Overall, this was a strong and logical response with good critical thinking.
-Teacher Wela
I think chaning our mindset is more effective for reducing stress than chaning our lifestyle.
>> I think changing our mindset is more effective for reducing stress than changing our lifestyle.
>> I think changing our mindset is more effective for reducing stress than changing our lifestyle.
Suppose that we feel stress from work due to a strange senior member.
>> Suppose we feel stress at work due to a strange senior coworker.
>> Suppose we feel stress at work due to a strange senior coworker.
There\'re two choices.
>> There are two choices.
The first one is quit a job or transfer work section.
>> The first option is to quit the job or transfer to another department.
>> The first option is to quit the job or transfer to another department.
This is a case of chaning lifestyle.
>> This is an example of changing one’s lifestyle.
>> This is an example of changing one’s lifestyle.
And second one is changing thinking which he is a weirdo by nature and has nothing to do with us.
>> The second option is changing our way of thinking by accepting that he is naturally strange and has nothing to do with us.
>> The second option is changing our way of thinking by accepting that he is naturally strange and has nothing to do with us.
If we select the first option, there is a possiblity of being another stranger in other sector.
>> If we choose the first option, there is a possibility of encountering another strange person in a different department.
Of course, it\'s more harder option for ourselves.
>> Of course, this is the harder option for ourselves.
>> Of course, this is the harder option for ourselves.
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