Which is more important in reality, inner beauty or outer beauty
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that inner beauty is more important than outer.
Because positive thinking, soft mind and loving people are expressed on face.
And inner beauty keep in long time during our life.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [이름]!
I\'ve heard many different opinions on this topic, but you\'re the only one who emphasized that our inner beauty reflects on our outside beauty, and I completely agree! There are those persons who are incapable of faking what is truly within them... But honestly and practically speaking I somehow believe that physical beauty is more important in this world nowadays because there are people who don\'t get the chance to prove themselves after being criticized for their appearances. And it is the sad truth :(
-Chammy
I think that inner beauty is more important than outer.
>>Correct
Because positive thinking, soft mind and loving people are expressed on face.
Because positive thinking, soft mind and loving people are expressed on face.
>>Because positive thinking, a soft mind, and loving people are expressed on the face.
OR
>>Because the face expresses a pleasant attitude, a sensitive mind, and a loving people.
And inner beauty keep in long time during our life.
And inner beauty keep in long time during our life.
>>And inner beauty keeps in a long time during our life.
OR
>>And inner beauty lasts a long time in our lives.
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