Which is more important, increasing people's standard of living, or protecting the environment?

2014-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Both of them are important: increasing people’s standard of living and protecting the environment. We need to figure out a way and make an effort to develop economy to improve people’s well-being, while we have to conserve energy and protect the environment. I think that we cannot choose one of them. For instnce, in a poor country, there are many people who are in desperate need of proper shelters and drinkable water. In order to help them, we need to build houses and supply water, which leads to destroy nature to some extent. Look at things that we benefit from in our daily lives: roads, bridges, electricity, buildings, automobiles, cell phones, internet, sewage system, etc. Without even one of them, we can hardly endure for 24 hours. We use and enjoy them at the expense of destroying our environment. How to balance between the two is a key when we work on improving people’s life. Global warming is a hot issue these days. Natural disasters are the nature of revenge.

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Hi there Sir [이름]! A burning Friday to you! Hihihi! Thank you very much for sending in your composition. I really admire you for always elaborating your ideas not only in class but also in writing. You always make me smile after reading your essay. Thank you! Talk to you very soon. Teacher Nina   Both of them are important: increasing people’s standard of living and protecting the environment. >> Correct! We need to figure out a way and make an effort to develop economy to improve people’s well-being, while we have to conserve energy and protect the environment. >> We need to figure out a way and make an effort to develop the economy to improve people’s well-being, while we have to conserve energy and protect the environment. >> OR: We need to figure out a way and make an effort to develip the economy to improve people\'s well being. We have to conserve energy and protect the environment. I think that we cannot choose one of them. >> Correct! For instnce, in a poor country, there are many people who are in desperate need of proper shelters and drinkable water. >> For instance, in a poor country, there are many people who are desperate and in need of proper shelters and potable water. In order to help them, we need to build houses and supply water, which leads to destroy nature to some extent. >> Correct! Look at things that we benefit from in our daily lives: roads, bridges, electricity, buildings, automobiles, cell phones, internet, sewage system, etc. >> Look at the things that we benefit in our daily lives: roads, bridges, electricity, buildings, automobiles, cell phones, internet, sewage system, etc. Without even one of them, we can hardly endure for 24 hours. >> Without one of them, we can\'t hardly endure twenty four hours. We use and enjoy them at the expense of destroying our environment. >> Correct! How to balance between the two is a key when we work on improving people’s life. >> Correct! Global warming is a hot issue these days. >> Correct! Natural disasters are the nature of revenge. >> Natural disasters are the revenge of the nature.

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