Which is the most important to you: being popular, accomplishing thing or being organized? Why?

Hi Sir [이름]!

What a perfect composition!

I really wish that all of your dreams will come true.

I am sure that you are doing your best at work and at home.
I totally agree with you that health is the most important thing.

We should always make sure that we eat nutritious foods.

Hope that you will have an awesome night ahead.

Teacher Nina

First of all, the important thing to me is being healthy and my family’s well-being.

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Health cannot be replaced by anything.

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Once you lose, you can hardly recover it.

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When I was younger, I was not aware of the importance of health, however, as I’m getting older, my body starts to exhibit various problems.

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I now have problems with my back, knees, digestion, eyes, skin irritation, and so on. 

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My face gets more wrinkles and my hair turns grey.

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I’m now getting more conscious of my health. 

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The second important thing is to live my life to the fullest.

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We sometimes feel tired and don’t do anything.

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We feel lethargic.

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However, life is really short and we have to live for the moment.

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We can’t get the time back once it passes. 

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There is no time to waste on trivial things.

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I want to succeed both at work and home.

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I should be professional and accomplish a career goal of taking a senior leadership position.

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At home, I’d like to be a respectable farther.

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I wish my wife and daugther to be happy.

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