Which is worse, obesity or anorexia?
학생이 쓴 원문
Two diseases are serious problems and develop other complications to people. In my opinion, anorexia creates a worse situation compared with obesity. A person who is obese can lose weight through exercise and diet. From my point of view, obese people get less stressed rather than anorexia. This is because they can eat the foods, and feel happy to lose weight. However, anorexia case is different. The body cannot allow any food, although the patients want to eat and have to increase their weight. They experience many times of vomiting and depression, and these circumstances make them lose weight again. Eating food is one of the basic necessary actings in our lives but it cannot be for them. A lot of articles, anorexia leads to insomnia and lethargy as well. Many experts say this person chooses excessive choice as suicide. In conclusion, anorexia cause more serious symptoms; therefore, it is worse than obesity.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jin!
Anorexia is more serious in one way or another because the appetite for food is still there since the body needs it. But the way a person thinks is destructible. It\'s a psychological problem that must be solved. Keep on writing more! ^^
~T. Maine
Two diseases are serious problems and develop other complications to
people.
>>Correct.
In my opinion, anorexia creates a worse situation compared with
obesity.
>>In my opinion, anorexia creates the worse situation compared to obesity.
A person who is obese can lose weight through exercise and
diet.
>>Correct.
From my point of view, obese people get less stressed rather than
anorexia.
>>Correct.
This is because they can eat the foods, and feel happy to lose
weight.
>>This is because they can eat food they want and feel happy to lose weight.
However, anorexia case is different.
>>However, anorexia\'s case is different.
The body cannot allow any
food, although the patients want to eat and have to increase their
weight.
>>Correct.
They experience many times of vomiting and depression, and these
circumstances make them lose weight again.
>>Correct.
Eating food is one of the
basic necessary actings in our lives but it cannot be for them.
>>Eating food is one of the basic necessities in our lives, but not for them.
A lot of
articles, anorexia leads to insomnia and lethargy as well.
>>A lot of articles say that anorexia leads to insomnia and lethargy.
Many experts
say this person chooses excessive choice as suicide.
>>Correct.
In conclusion,
anorexia cause more serious symptoms; therefore, it is worse than
obesity.
>>Correct.
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