Which kind of music do you think is better for your health and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
According to Sweden\'s some university paper, When patients listen to Louis Armstrong\'s song in hospital, Patients relieved the opreation pain. I often listen to Norah Jones or Michael Buble`s music like Jazz. When I can\'t sleep welll in the night, I listen to their song turnning up the volume. Then that makes me calm down, I can sleep well.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, Chory!^^
Thank you for your effort in doing your homework. It\'s a good practice to put your ideas into words and I\'m happy to correct the errors for you. Good job! Enjoy your weekend. ^^
According to Sweden\'s some university paper, When patients listen to Louis Armstrong\'s song in hospital, Patients relieved the opreation pain.
>>>According to some Sweden\'s university papers, when patients listen to Louis Armstrong\'s songs in the hospital, they were relieved from operation pain.
I often listen to Norah Jones or Michael Buble`s music like Jazz.
>>> I often listen to Norah Jones or Michael Buble`s Jazz music.
When I can\'t sleep welll in the night, I listen to their song turnning up the volume.
>>> When I can\'t sleep well at night, I listen to their songs turning up the volume.
Then that makes me calm down, I can sleep well.
>>>That makes me calm down then I can sleep well.
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