Which machines do you think make our lives easier?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the smartphone makes our lives easier.
It is just a small, square thing, but it makes life more convenient.
We can find any information through the phone and do almost everything.
We can take pictures, listen to music, watch movies, or some videos.
Also, we can contact our friends more easily and faster.
I couldn\'t imagine lives without phone.
강사 첨삭
Excellent job, Sarah!
Most of your sentences were already very good. Just a few small fixes:
Use “on the phone” (not “through”) for information.
Use “life” ([이름]gular) instead of “lives” when talking about your own life in general.
Don’t forget “a” before “phone.”
You’re writing very clearly. Keep it up!
~~Teacher Kate
I think the smartphone makes our lives easier.
>>CORRECT!
It is just a small, square thing, but it makes life more convenient.
>>CORRECT!
We can find any information through the phone and do almost everything.
>>We can find any information on the phone and do almost everything.
We can take pictures, listen to music, watch movies, or some videos.
>>We can take pictures, listen to music, watch movies, or videos.
Also, we can contact our friends more easily and faster.
>>Also, we can contact our friends more easily and quickly.
I couldn’t imagine lives without phone.
>>I couldn’t imagine life without a phone.
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