Which natural disaster do you fear most and why?
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I don\'t like volcanic eruptions the most.
If the vilcano erupt, there are a lot of damages caused by volcanic eruption.
1). A lot of victims will be died by volcanic eruption, or they will get a lot of economic damages.
2). Trees will be burned by volcanic eruption, so a lot of creatures in the mountain will be died.
3). Ashes of volcanic eruption will cover the sky, so the Earth\'s average temperature will be go down.
So I dislike volcanic eruptions the most, and I also fear about them.
But great thing is, in my country, there is only two volcanoes, and they are far at me.
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People fear natural disasters because they are disastrous. People\'s lives and safety are put in danger. Habitats, homes and property are destroyed. Most people would prefer the life (and everything that goes with it) that they live now to life (or lack thereof) that would follow a natural disaster.
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I don\'t like volcanic eruptions the most.
>>CORRECT
If the vilcano erupt, there are a lot of damages caused by volcanic eruption.
>> If a volcano erupts, it causes a lot of damages.
1). A lot of victims will be died by volcanic eruption, or they will get a lot of economic damages.
>>A lot of victims will die because of volcanic eruptions, or they will get a lot of economic damages.
2). Trees will be burned by volcanic eruption, so a lot of creatures in the mountain will be died.
>> Trees will be burned so a lot of creatures in the mountains will die as well.
3). Ashes of volcanic eruption will cover the sky, so the Earth\'s average temperature will be go down.
>> Ashes from the volcanic eruption will cover the sky so the temperature will go down.
So I dislike volcanic eruptions the most, and I also fear about them.
>> CORRECT
But great thing is, in my country, there is only two volcanoes, and they are far at me.
>> But great thing is that in my country, there are only two volcanoes and they are far at me.
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