Which of your friends or family posts the most entertaining content on social media?

2021-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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My daughter has two Instargram social media account. One is her own and another is her brother\'s. She made her brother\'s Instargram account herself. And she takes piectures and videos of her younger brother and updates it on the brother\'s Instargram account every time. Also she updates her Instargram. She thinks her brother should be a celebrity because he is handsome and smart. I am reluctant to post my photos or personal stories on the internet. Maybe because I am an older gerneration. I wonder whether I have to disclose my information on the internet in order to live with new generation.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!!!

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I know you can do it, you can achieve your goals!!!

T. Jeny


My daughter has two Instargram social media account.

>>My daughter has two Instagram social media accounts.
One is her own and another is her brothers.

>>correct
She made her brother\'s Instargram account herself.

>>She made her brother\'s Instagram account by herself.
And she takes piectures and videos of her younger brother and updates it on the brother\'s Instargram account every time.

>>And she takes pictures and videos of her younger brother and updates them on her brother\'s Instagram account every time.
Also she updates her Instargram.

>>Also, she updates her Instagram.
She thinks her brother should be a celebrity because he is handsome and smart.

>>correct
I am reluctant to post my photos or personal stories on the internet.

>>correct
Maybe because I am an older gerneration.

>>Maybe because I am an older generation.
I wonder whether I have to disclose my information on the internet in order to live with new generation.

>>I wonder whether I have to disclose my information on the internet in order to live with the new generation.

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