Which one do you think is better, living alone or with someone? Explain your answer.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think living with someone is better because living alone is dangerous. For example, when I go to the toilet at night, I feel scared. And I don\'t like alone. If I live in my house alone, I may feel lonely. And if I live alone, I can be in danger because everyone need a person who help them in the dangerous situation. Also, I like noisy house. So, sometimes, to make house noisy, I sing a song but, sometimes, I want to live alone because I want to spend my time alone.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kimberly:)
Having company in our house really is very comforting. You can have another person that can help you in every step of the way. :)
I think living with someone is better because living alone is dangerous.
>> CORRECT
For example, when I go to the toilet at night, I feel scared.
>> CORRECT
And I don\'t like alone.
>>I don\'t like being alone.
If I live in my house alone, I may feel lonely.
>> CORRECT
And if I live alone, I can be in danger because everyone need a person who help them in the dangerous situation.
>> I can also be in danger. Everyone needs another person during dangerous situations.
Also, I like noisy house.
>> Also, I like a noisy house.
So, sometimes, to make house noisy, I sing a song but, sometimes, I want to live alone because I want to spend my time alone.
>> So sometimes, I make the house noisy by singing. But sometimes, I want to live alone to appreciate my alone time.
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