Which quality best describes your life: exciting, organized, dull and why?

2015-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Indeed, I want my life to be exciting. I hope I can always say that every day is a chance to discover more about this wonderful planet we are on and to learn about the boundless gifts which we are learning exist and that we haven't even discovered yet. How can the sky be so beautiful and how can love of friends and home feel so good? We are so fortunate to experience life here. However, the reality is that I am often stressed out and feel tired. My life is sometimes filled with anger, frustration, and darkness. Life is tough. However, there is one thing that is quite obvious. We have to live our lives to the fullest. A moment, an hour, a day, a month, and a year is so precious that it won’t come back once it passes. My life could be characterized as being so serious. I have always worked hard and strived to move forward. I have challenged more all the time, not being satisfied with the current status. Reflecting on my past years, I have been too serious about my life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!

How are you?

Did you have a wonderful day?
I am so excited to hear stories from you in class.

I can say that your life is a bit exciting because you meet new people and you deal with different things everyday.

Have a marvelous day.
Teacher Nina


Indeed, I want my life to be exciting.

>> correct

I hope I can always say that every day is a chance to discover more about this wonderful planet we are on and to learn about the boundless gifts which we are learning exist and that we haven\'t even discovered yet.

>> Better: I hope I can always say that every day is a chance to discover more about this wonderful planet we are on, learn about the boundless gifts which we are learning exist and things that we haven\'t even discovered yet.

How can the sky be so beautiful and how can love of friends and home feel so good?

>> Did you mean: How can the sky be so beautiful, how can we feel the love of our friends and how can be our home feel so good?

We are so fortunate to experience life here.

>> correct

Indeed, I want my life to be exciting.

>> correct

However, the reality is that I am often stressed out and feel tired.

>> However, the reality is that I am often stressed out and tired.

My life is sometimes filled with anger, frustration, and darkness.

>> correct

Life is tough.

>> correct

However, there is one thing that is quite obvious.

>> correct

We have to live our lives to the fullest.

>> correct

A moment, an hour, a day, a month, and a year is so precious that it won’t come back once it passes.

>> correct

My life could be characterized as being so serious.

>> correct

I have always worked hard and strived to move forward.

>> correct

I have challenged more all the time, not being satisfied with the current status. 

>> Did you mean: I have been more challenged all the time, not being satisfied with the current status. 

Reflecting on my past years, I have been too serious about my life.

>> correct

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