Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with famil

2019-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Selene

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I will choose to receiving a lower-paying job with shorter hours. I know money can buy many this expect happiness. I see my friends are received salary more than me. One of friends works from 9am to 8pm usually. She finishes work 10pm three times a week. She can\'t sleep enough and enjoy the time dinner. She said she gets a lot of stress from the work. Although she receives high salary, she can\'t spend money because she has short time on weekday. She always sleep on weekend. I don\'t want to live like her. I really like my work environment. I work 9am to 6pm and I don\'t work overtime. I will save money and enjoy my spare time instead of receiving high salary.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kate!^^
Thank you for taking the time to make your homework. Your thoughts and ideas are really good. Keep it up! Have a nice day!^^

I will choose to receiving a lower-paying job with shorter hours. 
>>> I will choose to receive a lower-paying job with shorter hours.
I know money can buy many this expect happiness. 
>>> I know money can buy many things except happiness. 
I see my friends are received salary more than me. 
>>> I see my friends received a higher salary than me.
One of friends works from 9am to 8pm usually.
>>> One of my friends usually works from 9 AM to 8 PM.
She finishes work 10pm three times a week.
>>> She finishes her work  at 10 PM, thrice a week.
She can\'t sleep enough and enjoy the time dinner. 
>>> She has no enough sleep and can\'t enjoy her dinner time.
Although she receives high salary, she can\'t spend money because she has short time on weekday. 
>>> Although she receives a high salary, she can\'t spend  the money because she has a short time on weekdays.
She always sleep on weekend. 
>>> She always sleeps on the weekend.
I work 9am to 6pm and I don\'t work overtime. 
>>> I work from 9 AM to 6 PM and I don\'t work overtime.
I will save money and enjoy my spare time instead of receiving high salary.
>>> I can save money while enjoying my spare time rather than receiving a high salary.

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