While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities,

2020-06-22 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I have submitted my CV a lot when I tried to find a job. There are a lot of books which state how to succeed in finding a job. It was wrote by human resource officers and we believe it help a lot for job-hunters. There are too many steps when we apply for a job. We have CV evaluation process and then if someone are applicable he/she will have first job interview with person in charge and second interview with executives. Some company in Korea has very complicated interview process so interviewees have to prepare for their interview according to the requirements and processes what each company does. Recruiting a new employee should be considerable and careful for companies itself and for current staffs. In my experience, scores at school don\'t mean that job-hunters have the best abilities to perform their jobs. I think that personality is important factor that interview should evaluate, and if interviewees have worked in other company, we can hear their reputation. If I am a recruiter

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Good day Mr. [이름]~! Thanks for always actively participating in our discussions and thanks as well for doing your best in your essays. Continue improving~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I have submitted my CV a lot when I tried to find a job. 
>>> I have submitted my CV in many companies when I tried looking for a job. 
There are a lot of books which state how to succeed in finding a job.
>>> CORRECT
 It was wrote by human resource officers and we believe it help a lot for job-hunters.
>>>  It was written by human resource officers and we believe that it\'s helpful for job-hunters.
 There are too many steps when we apply for a job. 
>>>  There are so many steps when we apply for a job. 
We have CV evaluation process and then if someone are applicable he/she will have first job interview with person in charge and second interview with executives. 
>>> We have CV evaluation process and then if someone is qualified he/she will take the first job interview with the person in charge and second interview with executives. 
Some company in Korea has very complicated interview process so interviewees have to prepare for their interview according to the requirements and processes what each company does.
>>> Some companies in Korea has very complicated interview process so interviewees have to prepare for their interview according to the requirements and processes whatever each company does.
 Recruiting a new employee should be considerable and careful for companies itself and for current staffs. 
>>>  CORRECT
In my experience, scores at school don\'t mean that job-hunters have the best abilities to perform their jobs.
>>>  CORRECT
 I think that personality is the most important factor that interviewer should evaluate, and if interviewees have worked in other company, we can hear their reputation. If I were the recruiter...
>>>  CORRECT

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