Who did you play with most often when you were growing up?
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When I was young, I mostly played with my younger sister. We spent most of the day time together. Especially the most impressive moment I spent with her was talking together right before we go to bed. As our beds lie side by side, we could talk and laugh until we felt sleepy. The subject we talked about was nothing special and I could not even remember now, but that memory is so precious to me because I do not share room with my sister anymore. In daytime, we usually went to the playground and hung out with other friends. At that time, my friend was also my sister\'s friend regardless of age and we played together with anyone whom we met in playground. Wandering around the street together, we acted as if we were the most powerful and attractive girls in the world! However, we fought much when we were growing up. Not only a small quarrel, but we fought fiercely by hitting and kicking at each other. I was really mad at that time, but any longer, I could look back the past with a smile.
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Hello [이름] Ji^^
This made me laugh too!
I think this is the goodness of having siblings - the fighting!
Thank you for sharing ^^
When I was young, I mostly played with my younger sister.
>> CORRECT!
We spent most of the day time together.
>> We spent most of the day together.
Especially the most impressive moment I spent with her was talking together right before we go to bed.
>> Especially, the most impressive moment I spent with her was talking with her right before going to bed.
As our beds lie side by side, we could talk and laugh until we felt sleepy.
>> Because the beds were side by side, we could talk and laugh until we were sleepy.
The subject we talked about was nothing special and I could not even remember now, but that memory is so precious to me because I do not share room with my sister anymore.
>> CORRECT!
OR: The topic we talked about was nothing special and I can\'t remember it now, but that memory is so precious to me because I don\'t share a room with my sister anymore.
In daytime, we usually went to the playground and hung out with other friends.
>> In the daytime, we usually went to the playground and hung out with other friends.
OR: During the day, I usually went to the playground and played with other friends.
At that time, my friend was also my sister\'s friend regardless of age and we played together with anyone whom we met in playground.
>> At that time, my friend was my sister\'s friend regardless of age and I played with anyone I met at the playground.
Wandering around the street together, we acted as if we were the most powerful and attractive girls in the world!
>> CORRECT!
OR: Wandering around the streets together, we acted as if we were the most powerful and attractive girls in the world!
However, we fought much when we were growing up.
>> CORRECT!
OR: However, we fought a lot when we were growing up.
Not only a small quarrel, but we fought fiercely by hitting and kicking at each other.
>> CORRECT!
I was really mad at that time, but any longer, I could look back the past with a smile.
>> I was really angry then, but I could look back on the past with a smile.
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