Who do you admire
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Who do you admire? Do you try to be like this person (or people)?
My admire person who is Juliet Child. Juliet Child is a woman who started French cooking since 30 years old. And she tried to make a efficient French cooking book for people who are using English language. Also, her cooking program was containing new sensation. Many French cooking recipe was corrected by many her efforts. In addition she said that cooking is not difficult and afraid of fail. In her later years, she has got respecting and popular in many people. Especially, she lets know American who how to be joy and happy of the cooking. I respect her passion and challenge spirit without a stop. In cooking life her achievement is a good motivation people who want to become woman chef.
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She sounds a very good person. I think, when you are really passionate on the things you do, you will be really good at it.
And I envy her because she knows what she wants and she is good at it.
I hope that you will be like her someday.
I\'ll see you tomorrow.
~T.Chelsea
Who do you admire? Do you try to be like this person (or people)?My admire person who is Juliet Child.
>> The person I admire is Juliet Child.
>> I admire Juliet Child.
Juliet Child is a woman who started French cooking since 30 years old.
>> Juliet Child is a woman who started French cooking at the age of 30.
And she tried to make a efficient French cooking book for people who are using English language. >> And she tried to make an efficient French cooking book for people who use the English language.
Also, her cooking program was containing new sensation.
>> Also, he cooking program contains new sensation.
Many French cooking recipe was corrected by many her efforts.
>> Do you mean, \"Many French reicipes were invented by her.\"
In addition she said that cooking is not difficult and afraid of fail.
>> In addition she said that cooking is not difficult and we shouldn\'t be scared in failing.
In her later years, she has got respecting and popular in many people. >> In her later years, she became popular and may people respect her.
Especially, she lets know American who how to be joy and happy of the cooking.
>> Especially, she teach Americans how to be happy and enjoy cooking.
I respect her passion and challenge spirit without a stop.
>> I respect her passion and positive spirit.
In cooking life her achievement is a good motivation people who want to become woman chef.
>> As a chef, her achievement is a good motivation to people who want to become a woman chef.
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