Who do you admire? Why?

2021-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

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The person I admire is IU who is a famous singer and songwriter in Korea. I could start by mentioning that she is perfect in every way. She is not only a popular singer but also a talented songwriter. She has a sweet and amazing voice. In addition to being a singer, She is also renowned as an actor. Her songs are so inspiring and attractive, which always cheer me up whenever I\'m feeling stressed. Something else I need to comment on is that she is very kind-hearted and sympathetic. Every year, she donates to charities in her and her fans\' names to assist people in need.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]! ^^
I totally agree with you. IU is not only beautiful on the outside, but also on the inside. ^^
Thank you for making great sentences!

- T. Rina


1. The person I admire is IU who is a famous singer and songwriter in Korea. 
>> CORRECT!

2. I could start by mentioning that she is perfect in every way. 
>> CORRECT!

3. She is not only a popular singer but also a talented songwriter. 
>> CORRECT!

4. She has a sweet and amazing voice. 
>> CORRECT!

5. In addition to being a singer, She is also renowned as an actor. 
>> CORRECT!

6. Her songs are so inspiring and attractive, which always cheer me up whenever I\'m feeling stressed.
>> CORRECT!

7. Something else I need to comment on is that she is very kind-hearted and sympathetic. 
>> CORRECT!

8. Every year, she donates to charities in her and her fans\' names to assist people in need.
>> CORRECT!

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