Who do you think is better at saving money, boys or girls?
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I think girls will normally be good at saving money because generally, girls are better at managing something than boys. For example, girls normally like taking notes for their lessons and I think taking notes or a passbook will be helpful when they are managing their own finances. Also, moms usually manage family\'s finances, and girls are also female as moms, which means they can be better at taking care of their money.
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Who do you think is better at saving money, boys or girls?
I think girls will normally be good at saving money because generally, girls are better at managing something than boys.
>> or: If you ask me, girls are known to be better at managing things so I\'d say they are also ahead of boys when it comes to saving money.
For example, girls normally like taking notes for their lessons and I think taking notes or a passbook will be helpful when they are managing their own finances.
>> or: For instance, females are more inclined to take notes in class; what\'s more, I believe notes or passbooks will be helpful when handling their own financial affairs.
Also, moms usually manage family\'s finances, and girls are also female as moms, which means they can be better at taking care of their money.
>> or: Not to mention, moms typically serve as home managers, and girls being females just like moms are, it\'s safe to assume that they are superior to men in terms of money matters.
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