Who do you think should be blamed for this poor air quality?
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Poor air quality is very big problem all around the world and it will be worse as time goes on.
>>CORRECT!
>>Poor air quality is worldwide problem and it gets worse as time pass by.
Because it was the problem before, but haven’t be solved yet.
>>Because it was the problem before, but haven’t been solved yet.
If we blamed someone about this problem, anyone can’t avoid the blame.
>>CORRECT!
Because we all have the responsibility about environment.
>>CORRECT!
>>We are all responsible with our environment.
In the past, developed countries like America were damaged environment because of industrialization.
>> In the past, developed countries like America had damaged environment because of industrialization.
For example, LA smog was occurred by cars in 1943 and London smog is also famous for air pollution by coal in 1952.
>>CORRECT!
And now, developing countries like China and India are affecting on the environment pollution more than developed countries.
>> And now, developing countries like China and India are affected on the environment pollution more than developed countries.
However, we can’t ban developing countries’ industrialization because they also have the right to make an effort for economic growth.
>>CORRECT!
So the air pollution is worse.
>>CORRECT!
Thus, we all have to make an effort for green economic growth by using renewable energy like solar power to damage less to our environment than now.
>> CORRECT!
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