Who do you think should receive the highest salary in your country?

2020-03-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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I think that social worth of people is contained in salary. Of course, money isn’t standard of everything which decide their worth, but it can’t be also ignored. So, I think people who work for human should receive the highest salary in my country. First, firefighters are eligible to receive high salary. They work hard for public benefit at the most dangerous place in country. I think the salary should be contained hazard pay. For example, last year, forest fire was occurred in Korea. Some firefighters waited in front of the petrol station to prevent spreading a fire at risk of their life. Even, some firefighters suffer because of PSD which is occurred when they work due to fire and accident. They should be compensate about aftereffect although it is money. Also, at research, the fire department was chosen by the institution which Koreans can trust most. We trust how they work hard, so we said the tax is spent for them is very worthy.

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Thank you Se [이름]!
~Teacher Lucy

I think that social worth of people is contained in salary. 
>>CORRECT!
Of course, money isn’t standard of everything which decide their worth, but it can’t be also ignored. 
>>Of course, money isn’t standard of everything which decides their worth, but it can’t be also ignored. 
So, I think people who work for human should receive the highest salary in my country.
>>CORRECT!
First, firefighters are eligible to receive high salary. 
>>CORRECT!
They work hard for public benefit at the most dangerous place in country. 
>>They work hard for public benefits at the most dangerous place in the country. 
I think the salary should be contained hazard pay. 
>>I think the salary should be contained as hazard pay. 
For example, last year, forest fire was occurred in Korea. 
>>For example, last year, forest fire occurred in Korea. 
Some firefighters waited in front of the petrol station to prevent spreading a fire at risk of their life.
>>Some firefighters waited in front of the petrol station to prevent the fire spreading and to risk of their lives.
Even, some firefighters suffer because of PSD which is occurred when they work due to fire and accident.
>>Even, some firefighters suffer because of PSD which occurred when they work due to fire and accident.
 They should be compensate about aftereffect although it is money.
>> They should be compensated about the after effect in terms of money.
Also, at research, the fire department was chosen by the institution which Koreans can trust most. 
>>Also, at research, the fire department was chosen by the institution which Koreans can trust the most. 
We trust how they work hard, so we said the tax is spent for them is very worthy.
>>CORRECT!

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