Who has been your biggest influence in life?

2019-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

My parents was working together when I was teenager due to lack of money. They couldn\'t afford to support me and my younger sister, if they didn\'t work until late night. I feel frustrated, because my sister and I had to play all the time after school without our parents. My parents sincerely wanted us to live not to be down in the school so they give us enough money, So we could buy snacks and stationery whenever we needed to purchase. I didn\'t know that my parents save money hardly. They didn\'t buy clothes, house stuffs and electronics for themselves. They just sacrificed for us, even thought my father love drinking alcohol with his friends. He wouldn\'t try to go out for drinking due to saving money. If our family went out for dinner, parents always said that they were full so they just told us eat a lot as much as we could eat. I realized how deep parents love is after I had babies.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Your story is very inspiring. ^^ All parents should really be responsible to take care of their children

and to provide everything they need. You are lucky because your parents are very kind. Not all children receive

love as much as your parents give to you. My parents are also the same like yours. They are still working until now.

~~May~~

My parents was working together when I was teenager due to lack of money.

>> My parents were working together when I was a teenager due to lack of money.

or >> >> My parents were working hard together when I was a teenager to solve some financial problems.

They couldn\'t afford to support me and my younger sister, if they didn\'t work until late night.

I feel frustrated, because my sister and I had to play all the time after school without our parents.

>> CORRECT
My parents sincerely wanted us to live not to be down in the school so they give us enough money, So we could buy snacks and stationery whenever we needed to purchase.

>> My parents sincerely didn\'t want the people in the school to bring us down so they gave us enough money so that we could by snacks and stationery when needed.

I didn\'t know that my parents save money hardly. They didn\'t buy clothes, house stuffs and electronics for themselves.

>> CORRECT

They just sacrificed for us, even thought my father love drinking alcohol with his friends.

>> They just sacrificed for us even though my father loved drinking alcohol with his friends.

He wouldn\'t try to go out for drinking due to saving money.

>> He wouldn\'t try to go out for drinking for saving money.

If our family went out for dinner, parents always said that they were full so they just told us eat a lot as much as we could eat.

>> If our family went out for dinner, they always said that they were already full so they just told us to eat a lot as much as we could.

I realized how deep parents love is after I had babies.

>> I realized how deep my parents\' love is after I my babies were born.

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