Who I am...

2021-04-21 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

학생이 쓴 원문

My name is [이름]. And I\'ll like to tell you who I am. First, I will tell you my age. I am twelve years old in international age and, I am in middle s[이름]ol. I\'m just a ordinary student who like to hang out with friends and who wants to get good score in s[이름]ol exams. Second, where I am from. I am [Name], (which is obvious) who really love Korean food. Third, things I hate. I am a person who hates to eat avocados. It is very yucky and disgusting for me. It taste like grass for me. Plus, I really hate exams. Lastly, I am person who have lots of hobbies. I like to take picture (but not really good;;;), playing video games and, reading books. I like to hang out with my friends but that\'s not my hobbies. To sum up, it was all about me and who I am!

강사 첨삭

My name is [이름]. 
>> Correct.

 And I\'ll like to tell you who I am.
>> Correct.

First, I will tell you my age. 
>> Correct.

 I am twelve years old in international age and, I am in middle s[이름]ol. 
>> Correct.

 I\'m just a ordinary student who like to hang out with friends and who wants to get good score in s[이름]ol exams.
>>  I\'m just an ordinary student who likes to hang out with friends and who wants to get a good score in s[이름]ol exams.

Second, where I am from. I am [Name], (which is obvious) who really love Korean food.
>> Correct.

Third, things I hate. I am a person who hates to eat avocados.
>> Correct.

It is very yucky and disgusting for me. It taste like grass for me. 
>> It is very yucky and disgusting for me. It tastes like grass. 

Plus, I really hate exams.
Lastly, I am person who have lots of hobbies.
>> Plus, I really hate exams.
Lastly, I am a person who has lots of hobbies.

I like to take picture (but not really good;;;), playing video games and, reading books. 
>> I like to take pictures (but not really good;;;), playing video games and, reading books. 

I like to hang out with my friends but that\'s not my hobbies.
>> I like to hang out with my friends but that\'s not my hobby.
 
To sum up, it was all about me and who I am!
>> >> Correct.

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