Who in your life has been your biggest influence and why?

2017-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

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My mother is one of the people who have the biggest influence in my life. She always says that If you have passion when doing everything, it will flow in your direction and someone who has an eye for you will help enable you to complete work successfully. Also she emphasizes on having confidence and being a person who exudes confidence. Because she is a person who have all elements such as passion, confidence and marvelous abilities that are mentioned upper. She is always trying to doing something new with positive thinking. These points are making me to concentrate on my works and admiring me to make a move with partners together.

강사 첨삭

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I like you answer. There is always someone who influences us greatly.


Teacher Travis.


My mother is one of the people who have the biggest influence in my life.
>>Correct.

>>OR: My mother has the biggest influence in my life.
 She always says that If you have passion when doing everything, it will flow in your direction and someone who has an eye for you will help enable you to complete work successfully.
>>She always say that if you have passion on what you do,
it will flow in your direction and someone who has an eye for you will help enable you to complete work successfully.
 Also she emphasizes on having confidence and being a person who exudes confidence.
>>She also emphasize on having confidence and being a person who exudes confidence. (nice usage of \"exude\")
Because she is a person who have all elements such as passion, confidence and marvelous abilities that are mentioned upper.
>>Correct.
She is always trying to doing something new with positive thinking.
>>Correct.
These points are making me to concentrate on my works and admiring me to make a move with partners together.

>>These points makes me to concentrate on my works and admiring me to make a move with partners together.

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