Who in your life has been your biggest influence and why?

2018-03-29 · 첨삭 강사 Vitti

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Who in your life has been your biggest influence and why? 1. Hyun Ja-Lim give to me the best influence. 2. She was my paint teacher and supported to me. 3. She taught me 4 years. I studied with her for 4 years. 4. So I growed up to be a painter. 5. She is female artist and the famous painter, and 71 years old but she is passoionate. 6. I want to be a famous artist like her. 7. I thought her passion is great. 8. I always appreciate her.

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Who in your life has been your biggest influence and why?

1. Hyun Ja-Lim give to me the best influence.
2. She was my paint teacher and supported to me.
3. She taught me 4 years. I studied with her for 4 years.
4. So I growed up to be a painter.
5. She is female artist and the famous painter, and 71 years old but she is passoionate.
6. I want to be a famous artist like her.
7. I thought her passion is great.
8. I always appreciate her.


>> YOU CAN MAKE A SHORT ESSAY FOR YOUR ANSWER.

>>THE PERSON WHO HAD THE BIGGEST INFLUENCE IN MY LIFE IS HYUN JA-LIM. A 71 YEARS OLD, FAMOUS AND PASSIONATE FEMALE PAINTER. SHE WAS MY PAINTING TEACHER FOR 4 YEARS AND SHE SUPPORTED ME A LOT. I GREW UP TO BE A PAINTER BECAUSE OF HER. I WANT TO BECOME AS FAMOUS AS HYUN JA-LIM. SHE ALWAYS HAVE THAT PASSION AT WORK AND  I ALWAYS APPRECIATE IT.

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