Who inspires me the most
학생이 쓴 원문
My brother is inspiring me the most. I have a twin brother. I spent most of my life with him. Even though we fought a lot, we try to be a good friend to each other. After he had finished his military duty in 2016, his personality was changed a lot. Unlike the past, he tries to control his temper when he gets angry. I know how hard to change one\'s character, so I got influences by him since then.
These days, we often discuss about his early future plan, because he will be a senior next year. Telling him about what I regret the most when I was in university, I found that he also gets inspiration form me. When I was younger, I didn\'t believe in the saying, \"the blood is more dense than water\". As time goes by, I had realized that my brother is the most precious, and unchangeable relation to me. Therefore, I wish that me and my brother sustain the positive influences forever.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for sharing. Very well thought of homework. Keep it up! ^ ^
I hope the same for you. This kind of good relationship is what sets you apart from others. And at the end of the day, it is still your siblings who will protect you and be with you until the end. Take care of it. It\'s very precious! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
My brother is inspiring me the most.
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I have a twin brother.
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I spent most of my life with him.
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Even though we fought a lot, we try to be a good friend to each other.
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After he had finished his military duty in 2016, his personality was changed a lot.
>>After he finished his military service in 2016, his personality changed a lot.
Unlike the past, he tries to control his temper when he gets angry.
>>Unlike in the past, he tries to control his temper these days especially when he gets angry.
I know how hard to change one\'s character, so I got influences by him since then.
>>I know how hard to change one\'s character, but I got influenced by him since then.
These days, we often discuss about his early future plan, because he will be a senior next year.
These days, we often discuss about his early future plan, because he will be a senior next year.
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Telling him about what I regret the most when I was in university, I found that he also gets inspiration from me.
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When I was younger, I didn\'t believe in the saying, \"the blood is more dense than water\".
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As time goes by, I had realized that my brother is the most precious, and unchangeable relation to me.
>>As time goes by, I had realized that my brother is the most precious to me and would never trade any relationship with others.
Therefore, I wish that me and my brother sustain the positive influences forever.
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