Who is the most important person in your life? Why?

2014-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Barbara

학생이 쓴 원문

If I must choose person, I want to choose my mom. I think most of people likey to select parents. I also want to choose my mom. The reosons why I choose her are due to many cause. First, I have been taught by her about personaliity. She has teached me responsiblity, donation, and consideration. Because of her teaching, I can be a better person. Second, She is a nice teacher. When I have a problem for studying, she always gives me help. I'm very thankful for it. Third, I think she is my role model. She is always considerate for everyone, so I want to become person who is resemble with my mom.

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. I had a great time reading your composition. I think so, too. That most people will choose their parents. That\'s nice.   T. Barbara**,   If I must choose person, I want to choose my mom. >> If I must choose a person, I want to choose my mom. I think most of people likey to select parents. >> I think most of people are likely to select their parents. I also want to choose my mom. >> Correct! OR:>> Also, I want to choose my mom. The reosons why I choose her are due to many cause. >> The reasons why I choose her are due to many causes. First, I have been taught by her about personaliity. >> First, I have been taught by her about personality. She has teached me responsiblity, donation, and consideration. >> She has taught me about responsibility, generosity and consideration. Because of her teaching, I can be a better person. >> It\'s because of her teaching, I can be a better person.Second, She is a nice teacher. >> Second, she is a nice teacher. When I have a problem for studying, she always gives me help. >> When I have a problem in studying, she is always helping me. I\'m very thankful for it. >> Correct! OR:>> I\'m grateful.Third, I think she is my role model. >> Correct! OR:>> Third, she is a role model to me. She is always considerate for everyone, so I want to become person who is resemble with my mom. >> She is always considerate to everyone, so I want to become a person who resembles my mom.  

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